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Barren branches strike my windows furiously, ghastly, scrawny arms that want to grab me and murder me with their harsh fingernails. Savage ice has laid siege to the glass, crawling across its surface in wild, maddening formations. The sunlight illuminates the snow-coated rooftops, sending its alluring and deadly brightness into my tired eyes. Shadows play on my walls and create battle scenes of both triumph and bitter defeat. The entire world is an eerie mixture of beauty and death.   

The angry movement around me seems to hiss, scream, screech. But the violent silence is soon shattered as the haunting, desperate howl of an ambulance slices through the air. The sound expands in my ears like a sponge sucking up water. It veils my senses until all I feel is the cry of the ambulance, its distressed buildup, its nervous ascent into a brief, uneasy silence. It calls out, again and again, increasingly frenzied as it comes closer to my home.

All at once I want to cry out with it. I want to sing its hysterical shouts, I want steal its powerful voice to pour all my fear and love and loss into it.

Because suddenly I know. The trees know and the frost knows and the shadows know and siren is certain. Someone is racing to save you, but you're already gone.
At first I was so proud of this. I don't know why but I really loved it.

Now I'm not so sure.

Inspired by me reflecting on stuff when I was younger. I used to be very paranoid of ambulances haha. There was one period of time when I used to hear them every day.
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ZombiePenguin15 Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2012
This is brilliant:faint:!! The words held such force but still maintained rhythm.

The whole way through i had goosebumps. And i really liked the small end statement :nod:

Just an awesome job!! :glomp:
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Moryow Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2012
Thank you so much! :huggle:
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ZombiePenguin15 Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2012
Not at all, Its an amazing work :love:
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DramiraSK Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2011
Flawless, intense, beautiful, almost profound.
Your description says you're unsure about it, I don't know how you can't be proud. I'm jealous that you write so freely with such a strong voice! I hold back for now while I'm still learning things and getting into my comfort zone. This is an outstanding piece, if you ask me.
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Moryow Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2011
Thank you so much :heart: I'm glad you like my style. Keep writing! You'll surprise yourself one day :)
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Angelicrebel15 Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2011
This....it's so chilling and yet I could read it a thousand times over. Amazing work!
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Moryow Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2011
Thank you so much for reading my stuff and taking the time to comment! :hug:
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Red-banner Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2011
"the cry of the ambulance, its distressed buildup, its nervous ascent into a brief, uneasy silence. "

That is the best description of a siren ever.
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Moryow Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2011
Thank you :heart:
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DizzyTestament Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2011
Curious work. Images are catchy and alluring. Branches reaching out. Screaming certainties.

I have mixed feelings about the ending. The reference to a person needing saving -- it makes me find both satisfaction and dissatisfaction.
Satisfaction - there is a nice twist to the whole scene. Focusing on a person.
Dissatisfaction - it takes away from this abstract feeling we get at ( or, something like that). I sense but I may have trouble expressing...
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Moryow Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2011
I think I know what you mean, almost like it was blurry before, but pretty that way, and then suddenly sharpens?
Thanks for reading! If I ever rewrote this, or wrote something inspired by it, I would keep consistency in mind.
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DizzyTestament Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2011
It might just be a preference thing. I can see double on the ending - the relevance of adding a person (brings use to the siren's call in the night), while bringing in this eerie feeling from the picture you were painting.
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04belgarion2k7 Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Brilliant imagery and interesting use of metaphors! I think this flows really well and has a deep mesage hidden inside it. Good job! :D
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Moryow Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2011
Thank you! :hug: Yay, I'm glad you think it flows xD
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04belgarion2k7 Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
No worries :D
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ClayDragons Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2011
It's beautiful...:faint:
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Moryow Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2011
Thank you :) :tighthug:
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DJChocolate-Lover Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2011  Student General Artist
Oh wow I love that last line
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Moryow Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2011
Thank you <3
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2011
My first thought was that this was creepy, but with a sort of eerie beauty. But the end is sad which changes the feel of the entire piece (I ended up reading it three times). I think it's beautiful and you should be proud of it :heart:
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Moryow Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2011
Thank you so much! :) I feel so honoured that you read it! I appreciate it so deeply when someone reads my work. :)
And thank you for adding it to your favs! :hug:
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2011
It's my pleasure ^^

You can bet I'll be reading everything you write. I should have been watching you ages ago =D
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Moryow Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2011
That comment made me smile so much! Thank you! I really don't think my writing is anything special, but thank you <3 It truly means a lot to me.
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2011
We're always hardest on ourselves, right? Maybe you don't see the beauty like others do :huggle:
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Moryow Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2011
:hug:
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Russias-Pants Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh man. Extremely powerful, I love it so much. The ending is just amazing.
Wonderful, wonderful job.
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Moryow Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2011
:hug: Thank you! It means so much when people read my writing:)
Thanks for favouriting as well! :)
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Russias-Pants Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem, I'm glad to have read it. C:
Again, no problem~
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